Asterantha's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Penguinzz 1]

Cute

It's pretty cute. Not bad, but it's desperate for a grammatical editing and also a spell check. For example, there is no such word as 'civillions'. At least, not in English. But maybe it's Penguin? And I think, at another point, you meant, 'conspiracy'. There are more of these discrepancies.

In any case, it detracted slightly from the overall value of what you have. In reality, you've got a very good concept. It just needs more polish. And maybe some sounds. =/

CubePanda responds:

I sort of rushed the whole thing, the second one (if I ever make one) will be MUCH better

[FaceBook Begins]

Just awkward

If you, for example, ANIMATED this entire scene, it could be fairly funny. For example, the moment with the cat and the...unexpected...removal of your pants...would be (for some) entertaining if it happened on, say, a cartoon. On you, however, it was just plan uncomfortable.

If you can, turn the whole thing into a flash parody of yourself. That'd make it much better...and less...um...weird.

BillySchwaggles responds:

Yes, the awkwardness is the cringe humor though man. I love that kind of stuff.

[Sonic on Crack]

There's a little too much 'crack'

First of all, the audio is pretty wretched. You nearly killed me when I first started the movie because it was so grating to listen to. Like nails on a chalkboard. It also made the dialogue hard to hear.

Considering the nature of the dialogue, however, I wasn't missing too much. I thought there were definitely clever moments, such as the Monty Python interlude, but it was just so hard to hear. There needs to be more wit to the writing for this to work. The art could use some more detail, timing and expression too. Overall, not bad...but there's room for improvement.

CatpoopvsTrain responds:

Hhhmmm... It must be my speakers, because everything sounds crappy on my computer, so I probably didn't notice the bad audio. I do feel like the jokes were much better on paper and turned out less funny. I should work on having better dialogue than rely on sudden change and refences as jokes.